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Post by sandfur on Feb 12, 2010 0:52:54 GMT -5
g e n e r a l
name: Shiningpaw
age: 7 Moons
gender: she-cat
clan: Brookclan
rank:apprentice
a b o u t
weight: 7 pounds
height:23 cm
markings: none
coat: short white fur
eye color: brown and blue
personality: A bit shy. She is not such a good hunter, therefore she's a good fighter. She hides all her strength inside her and when she finds a friend they will see, that she is nice and eager to learn everything. She follows the warrior code as good as she can, but sometimes step over the rules a bit.
history: Her parents are some random BC cats. She fell in the river when she was a kit and therefor fears water now, which makes her a bad hunter. Therefor she is quite good on the ground and hunts birds and other land-prey very good. Because she is so shy she had not many friends even as a kit, but she hopes that she'll find some during her training and that these friends see through her shyness and see her true, happy self.
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Post by r i d d l e on Feb 12, 2010 7:30:44 GMT -5
the history and personality NEEDS to be at least one WHOLE paragraph. please add at least four more sentences on those. |
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Post by sandfur on Feb 12, 2010 11:15:28 GMT -5
modified
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Post by r i d d l e on Feb 12, 2010 17:56:05 GMT -5
you still need more on history. remember, a paragraph is AT LEAST FIVE sentences. |
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Post by sandfur on Feb 13, 2010 1:19:57 GMT -5
-.- modified again ^^
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Post by r i d d l e on Feb 13, 2010 11:09:09 GMT -5
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